by fireshower » Jul 9th, '06, 02:03
Would that be a Vernon Multiple Shift? I had to dig back into N1 because I couldn't remember the name of that move.
Anyways, that looked very good, just a couple things to note though...
During the part where you push the aces in, try to make the er..."counterpush" a little bit smoother and in one fluid motion. I don't know how to describe this without giving away any secrets, but I think you can figure out what part I'm talking about.
Really though, it's just a minor detail which nobody will really notice anyways, so it's not too important I think.
Also, the text at the beginning was somewhat distractive, which isn't too important, but perhaps something to note.
In general, you did an excellent job though
And of course, these are only my opinions, having two separate pushes might be a better thing.