by Serendipity » Jul 13th, '09, 20:54
Right, I've finally had time to sit down and watch these.
First things first. Well done. It takes a lot of courage to do a set like that, even more courage to carry on when the condition were almost entirely stacked against you, and a whole lotta balls to post it up for people to criticise.
I made proper notes about the whole show, but I wasn't sure how much feedback you wanted, so I'll stick to what was most apparent, and what I know best - a bit of stagecraft.
1. STAND STILL. You shuffle your feet a lot, and on stage, it looks awful. Don't do it. Actively remind yourself not to when you're on stage.
2. STAND UP STRAIGHT. Again, it helps you look and feel confident, and makes you more commanding on stage.
3. WHEN YOU MOVE, DO IT FOR A REASON. Much the like the "Don't shuffle" point, don't wander around on stage aimlessly. If you need to move, move confidently. If you don't, don't move at all.
4. SPEAK UP. Ok, a lot of things were exploding, but still at times it wasn't clear what you were saying, and I'm not sure the audience could see all that floating white text...
I really think that stuff would improve your performance no end. Give us a shout if you want my opinions on the effects as well, I don't want to overload you with criticism, especially as you did a very good job.
Oh, one thing though. That finale was the stupidest thing I've ever seen. Dude, there were kids running around, and you lit a bin full of explosives, then stuck your hand in. I mean come on, someone could've been seriously hurt, and it wasn't just yourself you were putting at risk. Not. Cool.
