by Demitri » Sep 6th, '06, 03:40
The beginning and end of the effect are very nicely handled - but I think the middle needs some work. Not in handling, but in presentation.
You begin the effect with a mistake, which is always a fun plot to go with. However, you then turn it into a blackjack routine. Personally, I don't see a tangible link between a blank deck routine and a blackjack routine. Perhaps with more time to run the idea through your head it can play. As you said yourself - you didn't know exactly what you were going to say as you performed. With some work, this plot can probably play.
With a bit of work, you can make the "mistake" play along a bit and ask if the spectator would like to play a game of Blankjack - where they use a blank deck of cards and merely think of the cards they want to be dealt. Since you gave her the A-K in the first place, I don't think it's a stretch to build patter along those lines - since nearly anyone would pick A-K in a blackjack hand (or A-J of course). Perhaps something to think about?
While I think you can probably make the blanks to blackjack routine work, I'm not sure how I feel about the royal flush production in the end.
Switching from a blackjack patter to a poker finish, for no reason other than satisfying the appearance of the royal flush, seems a bit anti-climactic in a way. It's an amazing production, don't get me wrong - but since it stands in such stark contrast to the blackjack patter you were working with before it, while strong - it feels slightly out of place.
Again, the handling was top notch. I can't make any comments on that. I just think the presentation needs work. Great job.