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Please Crituqe

Postby totalmagic » Dec 7th, '06, 01:48



Please watch my video and crituqe me as much as possible. that would help me a lot.

I know that when I say "they come right apart" it sounds cheesy

Here is the link http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6HEUWBay62E

Thanks for all your help

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Postby I.D » Dec 7th, '06, 02:50

cheesy as you like :lol:

that looked quite good... im assuming your new at this..

All i would say is speed it up slighty.. i always go towards the back of the hand.. then out.. then left and right... when I pull out and kind of pull slightly to the left a little.. makes it virtually undetectable..

but props man.. that looked kinda neat.. just a little on the slow side.. people knows its stuck in there.. i dont think they will suspect anything if you go a little faster

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Postby Lady of Mystery » Dec 7th, '06, 11:51

looked very good, well done!

The only thing I'd suggest is that there's no need to go into telling them that the bands are behind each other and can't come apart, they can see that.

I love the effect, well done

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Postby totalmagic » Dec 7th, '06, 18:49

I.D wrote:im assuming your new at this..
yes I am very new to this trick and magic in a whole. I have been practicing for only a little over a month

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Postby Dirty Davey » Dec 7th, '06, 19:28

looks really nice good work with that

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Postby Renato » Dec 7th, '06, 20:02

Nicely done. The only thing I would say is with regards to your presentation - try to avoid the running commentary. Obviously some comment needs to be made about the bands being trapped, but repetition of words such as 'obviously' is more likely to raise suspicion in your audiences mind as opposed to quell it.

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Postby dat8962 » Dec 7th, '06, 20:08

Yep - agree with the above.

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Postby macos » Dec 7th, '06, 21:43

Yes, I agree with Cardza. If you comment the obivous it just make the whole suspicious. If you do card magic, you never do a D/L and say: "look here is only one card, the ace of spades...". Even if what you say is true (which is the case in your trick) it will rise unnecessary doubts about it. Maybe try a line like "obivously it can't go trough the sides or the middle", as you do the moves that correspond to your words. Simplicity makes it effective.
What comes to the working, try to make the moves a bit more smoother (just practice more). Show that the rubber bands are trapped, once, it's convincing enough. You don't have to show it from 10 different angles :D .
And the most important comment from my side. The finale. Instead of pulling the rubberbands apart with a fast motion like in the vid. Build a climax. Make small circular motions as you SLOWLY move the rubber bands apart and make it look like you are totally focusing with your mind on the rubberbands as you keep blowing (with less power than in the vid) on the bands. Now when you do it slowly and if your spectators are close to you (closer then the camera in the trick) you can try this: When blowing, twist your right hand 90 degrees horisontally clockwise (so the the back of the hand is facing you) so that only the other string (of the right r-band) has moved apart from the "bunch". And keep blowing on the band and moving your right hand to the right so that the other string too gets released from the "bunch" and the rubberbands sepparate. Cover up the fact that the rubberbands are already separated with small circular motions.
I hope you get my weird explanation but what I'm trying to say is that it's probably more powerful if you present the ending slowly making it look like magic. Instead of pulling them fast appart making it look like a trick.

Anyways, nice work and I enjoyed the video. And even though I'm giving you alot of criticism I don't handle the sleight nearly as good as you do. Just gave some ideas on the presentation.

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Postby totalmagic » Dec 8th, '06, 17:45

Thank you for your help and encouregement, this is my favorite trick I have so, thanks for helping make it better. I really glad that I have you guys to help "tutor" me.

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Postby i1011i » Dec 8th, '06, 18:21

I will admit, I didn't read everything though I tried to scan through it all and didn't notice this suggestion. If it is there, sorry. :P

Make sure to look into the webcam/camera or whatever and do not watch yourself on the screen. Have you ever had a conversation with someone and they stared 6 inches above and to the right of your head the whole time? Kinda disorientating and the same effect applies to this as well.

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