the last 41 seconds was infocus and watchable and passable for a lay audience.
the first 3 minuets however, were you hid in the bottom right hand corner of the picture, in the shadows, juggling what i asume were some dark objects was not.
even when you showed the card to camera it was covered by a big shadow and hard to see, get some light in there and second film yourself in the center of the shot, we don't need to see the pictures on the wall, nice though they may bey.
at some poinn't you started to produce a card then folded it back into your hand only to take it away again, you need to work on that bit its screams dodgey business going on here.
that said what i could see was ok but I'm not a cardie so will leave the deconstructing to someone else, all i can say is I was blatently aware what was going to happen, even your double was telegraphed.
work on framing your shots better and with more light and you should look better.
