by Ian The Magic-Ian » Jan 17th, '09, 18:24
Alright, three things for you that I noticed or disliked:
1. Your facial expressions were over acted and fake looking. I know they were fake but it shouldn't look that way to the audience. Especially the fire wallet, you want to look surprised you don't want to look like you're acting. (even though you are)
2. Sort of unimportant seeing as it doesn't pertain to the quality as a magician; but I'd change "award winner magician" to "award winning magician". If you want it to look professional, proper grammar is good to have.
3. The end where you gave information such as close-up, all ages, etc. That bit became rather repetitive.
Just some things you might want to work on or change. The biggest thing for me was your over acting.
That's all. It was good though.
Barton: Have you read the Bible, Pete?
Pete: Holy Bible?
Barton: Yeah.
Pete: Yeah, I think so. Anyway, I've heard about it.