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hello, I've just started with marketing in magic. One of the part is 3 Fold Brochure. Could You tell me please what do You think about it. grammar etc...
front side:
http://i789.photobucket.com/albums/yy17 ... lotka1.jpg
back side:
http://i789.photobucket.com/albums/yy17 ... lotka2.jpg
thanks for any help
Simon

the second one wont open for me for some reason.
However, the 1st one.I have one piece of advice.

you need to have it in portrait, rather than landscape, as it wont stand up on a table.
This way, it just looks like a poster, or flier.
also, the wording should all face the same way. In the centre, its reversed, and it looks like it's a mistake.

and also, Its in the wrong order.first thing you see should be you, and your name, then have people tell you how good you are, then finaly contact details.

And, why not include the contact info descretly on each panel of the folder? Hammer that message home!

Hi. Looks quite nice. Just a few words of advice. As Dale said, it needs to be portrait really. Secondly, get someone to proof read it for you. It's a bit difficult to read the writing on the screen, but I did notice a few superfluous capital letters here and there, and an odd grammatical mistake. It just needs knocking into shape a bit. Thirdly, include the surnames of the people who gave you the testimonials. Just using the first names looks a little like you just made them up. It also helps to mention what kind of event you worked at to get the testimonial, eg birthday party, wedding reception, corporate booking etc.

Lastly ( ) I notice you'll be using this flier to sell yourself both as a "grown-up" entertainer and as a kids magician. The accepted wisdom is to separate these two areas of your performance. Have one flier for the grown up bookings, and another for the kids work.

Hope this helps.

thanks, when it will be fold, photo with me and my name and surname will be on the front of brochure- all of the rest its inside,
the contact details- when brochure its fold the wording its the same face:)
thanks for help- but what about grammar???
Simon

baal wrote:thanks for help- but what about grammar???
Simon

As mentioned above, get someone to proof read it. There are a few mistakes.

thanks Paul, btw- could You tell me where are the mistakes?? I'm not English, and I've gave this text to the proffesional translator, but probably He is not enough good:)
So I will be greatfull if anybody help me with grammar:)
Simon

A couple of picky typographical things:
- I'd have the text in left justified text, and remove the hyphenated word wrapping. Justified text is horrible to read
- Remove the www. from your web address, having it is just irksome and isn't needed nowadays (everybody knows that example.com is a web address these days)
- Phone numbers should be formatted either as 07xx xxx xxxx or 07xxx xxx xxx